Published December 24, 2008
We shall teach our children, the ones we say we love the most, fairytales. Society nowadays and since we can remember has taught us not to lie... What happened to being sincere? Have we lost all our values? We aspire to bring up geneerations to come greater and wiser than we all were, using our old fashioned ways. We tell our children about ' happily ever afters' but why do we insist on doing so if we can't set an example to that. In the world of today, optimism may not always be the key to happiness. Can we still aspire to love unconditionally or do we base everything on the option of divorce? In the society of today, do we dream on, or should we try be more realistic? Is true love too far out of reach, or are we all just too deep in out thoughts to open our minds to something new?
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This is rather...philosophical. But to be a philosopher we must not only question, but have opinions too. So it's very well to question things and ask of this world the wonders that we know of not, we must too, however, have opinions. Tell us of your views. Why of course, to be philosophers we must wonder, and question but we must too make clear our opinions. Our thoughts and feelings.
Give us more information than simply questions. You have to attempt to answer them using your own cognitive thought processes. In which way you do this is entirely down to your own way of thinking hence individual cognitive thought processes [/philosophicalrant]
This is a good start. Is this just the introduction? If it is, post the rest. If it is the whole article, it needs a lot of work. You never take an opinion. All you do is ask the reader questions. Where is your thesis? Tell the reader where you stand. You have some interesting ideas, you just need to elaborate more. This is not an article. It is not memorable and leaves the reader thinking, "Where's the rest?"
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Good work,
Sakura